Typos found.
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Typos found.
I don't think this can be considered a "bug" but I didn't want to bother the admin personally. Besides, it's not huge.
When you visit Professor Elm on Wednesday at the National Park, he says:
"Hey [username]! It's good to see you hear. On Wednesdays I take a day off and always come to the National Park. There's something so relaxing and serene about watching the bug Pokémon in their natural habitat. It's just so relaxing! Don't you agree?"
The bolded areas are the parts that have issues. ^^;
Hear should be "here."
And the "It's just so relaxing!" is redundant. If you read it aloud, it's awkward to use the same word twice.
Perhaps it could be changed to either:
"Hey [username]! It's good to see you here. On Wednesdays I take a day off and always come to the National Park. There's something so beautiful and serene about watching the bug Pokémon in their natural habitat. It's just so relaxing! Don't you agree?"
Or...
"Hey [username]! It's good to see you here. On Wednesdays I take a day off and always come to the National Park. There's something so relaxing and serene about watching the bug Pokémon in their natural habitat. It's just so peaceful! Don't you agree?"
Just thought I'd mention.
When you visit Professor Elm on Wednesday at the National Park, he says:
"Hey [username]! It's good to see you hear. On Wednesdays I take a day off and always come to the National Park. There's something so relaxing and serene about watching the bug Pokémon in their natural habitat. It's just so relaxing! Don't you agree?"
The bolded areas are the parts that have issues. ^^;
Hear should be "here."
And the "It's just so relaxing!" is redundant. If you read it aloud, it's awkward to use the same word twice.
Perhaps it could be changed to either:
"Hey [username]! It's good to see you here. On Wednesdays I take a day off and always come to the National Park. There's something so beautiful and serene about watching the bug Pokémon in their natural habitat. It's just so relaxing! Don't you agree?"
Or...
"Hey [username]! It's good to see you here. On Wednesdays I take a day off and always come to the National Park. There's something so relaxing and serene about watching the bug Pokémon in their natural habitat. It's just so peaceful! Don't you agree?"
Just thought I'd mention.
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Re: Typos found.
Umm where do you use the same word twice? "It is just so relaxing!" I don't see doubles anywhere plus if you mean double from the previous sentence sounds to me like he's really enthused and geeky
Re: Typos found.
Doubling words too close together is generally considered bad writing. Dialogue is a bit of an exception because people don't always speak with perfect grammar.
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Re: Typos found.
Read the text:ladywizard wrote:Umm where do you use the same word twice? "It is just so relaxing!" I don't see doubles anywhere plus if you mean double from the previous sentence sounds to me like he's really enthused and geeky
There's something so relaxing and serene about watching the bug Pokémon in their natural habitat. It's just so relaxing! Don't you agree?
Sure, people don't talk with perfect grammar, but these are people that are considered professors. It also doesn't sound all that right to me. It's just something that irks me when it comes to writing. ^^;
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Re: Typos found.
It may irk you, but it does emphisise how relaxing Elm is finding the situation. - also, i could be way off the mark here... but wasnt Elm like that in the anime?
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Re: Typos found.
All the professors had nerd quirks... Oak was haiku expert forget what else I saw but Elm's sprite has his briefcase with pokeballs falling open
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Re: Typos found.
Hmm...perhaps. But the "hear" does need to change, definitely. ^^; That's what's mostly the issue. xD I'm just saying it doesn't sound right to have the same word so close together. And I can't really remember how Elm was. I mostly play the generation 1 games. In fact I'm playing my old Pokemon Blue game.
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Re: Typos found.
Thank you for pointing this out. As it is a minor issue, the fix will be included in the development version and rolled out in the next update.
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Re: Typos found.
No problem~! I'll let you know if I find anything else.
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Posting here rather then starting a whole new topic
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Re: Typos found.
Fixed, thanks.