Pokemon Comics

saphire · Post by **saphire** » Thu 10 Nov, 2005 10:46 pm

Well, I made some comics and i want everyone to see them. Here are my first comics:
Comic1

Author's Coments: My first pokemon comic ever!!!

Comic2

Author's Coments: Well, This isn't one of my best comics.

Pikachu90000 · Post by **Pikachu90000** » Fri 11 Nov, 2005 12:57 am

The following is VERY harsh, if you can't stand harsh rantings I suggest you press back on your browser.
Even thought it is your first 2 coimcs. I like to go harsh so that you can improve on your third.
Example of a very nicely done comic (Copyright 2003-2005 Recon Dye)

Comic One rant:
The first two frames are perfect, though you might need some text on the day on getting the first Pokemon things. The 3rd frame, I don't get. There is red on the line that Paco is talking. IF you are gonna do text boxes you might as well make them all the same, not Prof. Oak gets the one made by Nintendo and everybody else used a box made in Paint. "Where do you thing your going?" That's a typo. Look at Recon's comic, it has a border around everything and it looks spaced out. Yours doesn't. How come 2 people appear for no reason? Then Pokeballs change colours. The continue part is only useful for cliffhangers or some other things. For some reason Paco looks like he is about to walk from frame 4 to frame 9. 7/10 for Comic One.

Comic Two rant:
How come everything's so blurry? Is this a png or a well done jpg? Where's the Girl? She disappears in frame 1! What's next? The world's gonna end? The background text box in frame one isn't one colour. Borders are gone for the rest of the comic.

This is a example of a better battle. Squirtle can't use Ember at level 5 and Squirtle can't learn Water gun. Squirtle's first water move is Bubble... Ember doing more damage than Water Gun? That's uber *. Dialogue with telling damage is pretty much pointless. You could remove the battle field with Gary and Paco battling with Pokemon in their tiny sprites using the same moves. The other way is to remove the box on the bottom that tells "Charmander used Ember" and keep the "Charmander (malesign) Lv5". Get a trial version of Photoshop Elements, saphire... Frame 4 just plain sucks. How come things are cut off in frame 5? Black space running into frame 6. Yay! The return of the mysterious dots! You spelled two wrong. How come people appear for no reason again and giving random packages? Where is the filler between frame 10 and 11? That whole filler can make one comic. People disappear in frame 12 again? Where is Paco going? How come there is a random nerd running around the city? Why is there black space on the TBC frame? 5/10
Average: 6/10

saphire · Post by **saphire** » Fri 11 Nov, 2005 11:37 pm

Pikachu90000 wrote:The following is VERY harsh, if you can't stand harsh rantings I suggest you press back on your browser.
Even thought it is your first 2 coimcs. I like to go harsh so that you can improve on your third.
Example of a very nicely done comic (Copyright 2003-2005 Recon Dye)

Comic One rant:
The first two frames are perfect, though you might need some text on the day on getting the first Pokemon things. The 3rd frame, I don't get. There is red on the line that Paco is talking. IF you are gonna do text boxes you might as well make them all the same, not Prof. Oak gets the one made by Nintendo and everybody else used a box made in Paint. "Where do you thing your going?" That's a typo. Look at Recon's comic, it has a border around everything and it looks spaced out. Yours doesn't. How come 2 people appear for no reason? Then Pokeballs change colours. The continue part is only useful for cliffhangers or some other things. For some reason Paco looks like he is about to walk from frame 4 to frame 9. 7/10 for Comic One.

Comic Two rant:
How come everything's so blurry? Is this a png or a well done jpg? Where's the Girl? She disappears in frame 1! What's next? The world's gonna end? The background text box in frame one isn't one colour. Borders are gone for the rest of the comic.
This is a example of a better battle. Squirtle can't use Ember at level 5 and Squirtle can't learn Water gun. Squirtle's first water move is Bubble... Ember doing more damage than Water Gun? That's uber *. Dialogue with telling damage is pretty much pointless. You could remove the battle field with Gary and Paco battling with Pokemon in their tiny sprites using the same moves. The other way is to remove the box on the bottom that tells "Charmander used Ember" and keep the "Charmander (malesign) Lv5". Get a trial version of Photoshop Elements, saphire... Frame 4 just plain sucks. How come things are cut off in frame 5? Black space running into frame 6. Yay! The return of the mysterious dots! You spelled two wrong. How come people appear for no reason again and giving random packages? Where is the filler between frame 10 and 11? That whole filler can make one comic. People disappear in frame 12 again? Where is Paco going? How come there is a random nerd running around the city? Why is there black space on the TBC frame? 5/10
Average: 6/10

I made this comics 1year ago, i wasn't as good as i'm now. Well, in comic two, the text block was hidding the girl.

Comic3:

Author's Coment: Another not so good comic

Pokémon Princess · Post by **Pokémon Princess** » Sat 12 Nov, 2005 3:08 am

It different but nice, I guess.

saphire · Post by **saphire** » Sat 12 Nov, 2005 3:32 am

Thanks

Comic4:

Athor's Coments: Well, a better comic

Pikachu90000 · Post by **Pikachu90000** » Sat 12 Nov, 2005 3:47 am

Improvements, but the plotline pretty much sucks...

saphire · Post by **saphire** » Sat 12 Nov, 2005 3:59 am

Critics...
Well here is comic 5:

Author's Character Coments: Paco:- Why do Luis scared me ?

Pikachu90000 · Post by **Pikachu90000** » Sat 12 Nov, 2005 4:12 am

...OMGWTFBBQ... That is all I have.

zen · Post by **zen** » Sat 12 Nov, 2005 2:46 pm

Those are pretty good I'll give it a 6/10

saphire · Post by **saphire** » Sat 12 Nov, 2005 4:06 pm

Thanks,
Comic5:

Author Comments: This is the first apparence of the mysterious pkm ''Sphiro''(made by me)

darkness · Post by **darkness** » Sun 13 Nov, 2005 9:04 pm

OMGWTF, 10/10 For All Of Them!

They Own! They're SOO Cool! They Rule!!!

You Should Make More!!!!

PD Wooper · Post by **PD Wooper** » Sun 13 Nov, 2005 9:15 pm

saphire wrote: Critics...
Well here is comic 5:
Author's Character Coments: Paco:- Why do Luis scared me ?

Two /guys/?
Is the girl look-alike a transvesite or something?

6/10 for quality, but a definite 10/10 for effort.

saphire · Post by **saphire** » Mon 14 Nov, 2005 12:22 am

darkness wrote:OMGWTF, 10/10 For All Of Them!

They Own! They're SOO Cool! They Rule!!!

You Should Make More!!!!

Yep, i will make more.Thanks

PD Wooper wrote:
saphire wrote: Critics...
Well here is comic 5:
Author's Character Coments: Paco:- Why do Luis scared me ?
Two /guys/?
Is the girl look-alike a transvesite or something?

6/10 for quality, but a definite 10/10 for effort.

Thanks

Comic7:

Autor and Characters' Coments:
Author: First apparition of Alex.
Paco: Yay!!! A new guy in team!!!

Post by **Pikachu3828** » Mon 14 Nov, 2005 12:28 am

Hey saphire, nice comics but they're quite large and coupled with them being shwon in quotes it's making this topic take quite a while to load, especially for our lower-level connection users, so could you please link to comics in future, or post links to old ones and just make the newest one an image?

saphire · Post by **saphire** » Mon 14 Nov, 2005 1:19 am

Comic8
Author and character's comments:
Author: Paco and Gary's battle starts
Paco: I will defeat you, Gary!!!!