Christmas poem

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Christmas poem

Post by Robert »

I had to do a Christmas poem for homework and anyone who would like to can read it and comment.

Christmas poem
One christmas when snowballs fly,
snow-snow-snowflakes from the sky.

Christmas joy, Christmas joy.
Open a present and get a toy.

One of the teachers got hit on the head,
mouth went wonkey, they could only eat bread.

Christmas joy, Christmas joy.
Santa will come if you're a good boy.

When the snow melted it was boring,
instead of snow it was pouring.

Christmas joy, fading away.
When someone shouted out, "Hey!"

Everyone look up way up high,
they saw Santa in the sky.

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Post by seavicky95 »

that is a very good poem! 9.5/10.
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Post by Fazzy »

I'm not sure about the teacher getting hit on the head..... 7/10.
Well, Timmy, aren't you being a cotton-headed ninny muggins.

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Post by Robert »

thank you both.

and fazzy I couldn't think of anything else to put there instead.

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Post by flare »

d-dang @_@ 9.9/10!
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Post by Robert »

ok so that makes a 9.5 and 7 and 9.9 all out of 10.
I'm just going to work out the mean.
9.5+7+9.9= 26.4
26.4 / 3 = 8.5 (only around that)

/ = divide.
so If my calculations are right (I did just do them quick in my head) the mean is 8.5.
that's quite good.
more than i thought it would be

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Post by pikapower06 »

7.9/10. Its nice ^^
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Post by Shrine Sprite »

Like Fazzy said already, I'm not so sure about the third verse. :lol:
It's very good though. o:

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