Pi-Ka-Pi-Pa-Pi-ka-Pi-Pi Do-Re-Squirtle-Char-La-Ti-Bulbasaur!
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Pi-Ka-Pi-Pa-Pi-ka-Pi-Pi Do-Re-Squirtle-Char-La-Ti-Bulbasaur!
Me: LOLZ! L()LZ! I FOOLED U I FOOLED U! LAUGH LAUGH LAUGH LAUGH LAUGH!
Pikachu: Pika pi! (that is mean!)
Me: Rule number one: Laugh when u fool someone!
Me: LOLZ! I FOOLED YA AGAIN! Here we gooooooooooooooo:
5 little :Pikachu:s dancing the Pokerap
One fell down and bumped his head :'(
Mumma called the and the said,
No more :Pikachu:s dancing the Pokerap
NAAH! Eh-eh.
Pikachu: *scowls* Grr.
Me: Heh...NEXT SONG!
: *Whistles the Funkytown music*
: Uh...*raises eyebrow*
Me: Eh...NEXT SONG! *laughs nervously*
Manager: This is NOT working. COMMERCIAL BREAK!
Me: *machinery whirrs down as I start singing* Ohhh.....I just lo-HEEY! NO FAIR!
Commercial: Pikachu Steaks! Yumm yummy nummy! Juicy and Meaty! Fine print: Best served baked in a frying pan.
: *sweatdrop* Ehhh....
Me: GET 'IM!
: *runs away* AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!
All except : *chases* YUMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM!
: *gets stuck in tree* They'll never find me here...
Me: *peek* FOUND YA!
: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRGGGGGGH!
Director: CUT!
: Cut? OKAY! *uses razorleaf*
All: AAAAAAAAAAAAAGH!
*do do do dooo dooooo*
FIN
lolz. Funny, eh?
NEXT STORY!!!
Narrator: "Production Note: This Story contains life threatening situations and
Director: "Action!"
Ash: "*sigh* I don't like this place. It's too hot and dry..."
: "Pika pi...(Me niether)"
Misty: "And all my Pokemon are asleep from that wild Golbat."
Brock: "I think we should head west. I sense that thre's a town around there."
: "Pika? (What's that?)"
Ash: "HUH?!"
: "*jumps out* CRRAWKS!
: "PI-KAAAH! (Oh-noeeeez!)"
: "*uses Sunny Day* *Heat intesifies* GRWP!
: "*flies into air and land 10 feet away* Pi-i-i-ika-a-a-a...."
Misty + Brock: "Poor Pikachu!"
: "GRRRWAK! *uses Headbutt*
: "*gets hit* Pik! (Oww!)
: "*Sandstorm*"
: "*skids through sand, weakened* Pi-ka! (Aw, CRAP!)"
Ash: PIKACHU!
: "Piikaaa..."
: "*Body Slam* TWWACK!"
: "*barely alive* Pi-i-i-ika-a-a-a...(A-a-a-sh-h-h-h...)"
Ash: Pikachu?!
Brock: "Misty, Ash. We gotta get Pikachu to a Pokemon center. We're out of health items and the Sunny Day won't wear off until bedtime."
Ash: "I'll stay with Pikachu."
: "Ash, go on without me. I'm sure that you'll find help in time. But if not, you'll lose me forever. *cough choke wheeze*"
Ash: "I can't leave you! You guys go on!"
*Misty and brock leave*
: "*cough cough* Ash. They need you. Why stay here when you could use charizard to fly to a Pokemon Center?"
Ash: "Because you're also my Pikachu and you're my partner. Together, we're camoflauged targets metaphorically...Apart, we're sitting ducks."
: "Listen, *cough* Ash. If you had gone with them, you could have sent out one of you're Pokemon to protect me. Why stay?"
Ash: "Because...they might faint and leave you vulerable. You need shade. Go, Bayleef!"
: "Baay-LEEF! (Hi, Ash!) *grin*"
Ash: "*glares*"
: "*glances at Pikachu* What the hey happened?!"
Ash: "*shakes fist* JUST GIVE PIKACHU SOME SHADE!!!"
: "Okay okay! Jerk..."
: "Ash. I really don't need-"
Ash: "Of course you need shade!"
Meanwhile...
Nurse Joy: "Hi guys!"
Brock + Misty: "*frantically* ASH'S PIKACHU IS DYING!!!"
Prof. Oak: "*looks like a kid dressed up like him* Hi."
All: "*faints* Oyg!"
Oak: "*glances* Was it something I said?"
All: "*run afap(as fast as possible) to Ash's location* is Pikachu okay? Did he die? Did Spearows try to eat him like vultures?"
Ash: "Quiet! He's saying something..."
: "You must get me to a Pokemon center soon, I only have a weak grip on life."
Ash: "Go, CHARIZARD! Charizard, you need to fly us to Desert City!"
: "Poor Pikachu. *strongly and curiously* Is he dead? "
All: "HEEY!"
: "Hay is for horses and sometimes for cows! People don't eat it, cuz they don't know how! "
Director: "CUT!!! Great act! Good acting Pikachu, great! Second act coming soon! Lolz."
: "*blushes* Awww, thanks!"
WIP (Work in progress)
Pikachu: Pika pi! (that is mean!)
Me: Rule number one: Laugh when u fool someone!
Me: LOLZ! I FOOLED YA AGAIN! Here we gooooooooooooooo:
5 little :Pikachu:s dancing the Pokerap
One fell down and bumped his head :'(
Mumma called the and the said,
No more :Pikachu:s dancing the Pokerap
NAAH! Eh-eh.
Pikachu: *scowls* Grr.
Me: Heh...NEXT SONG!
: *Whistles the Funkytown music*
: Uh...*raises eyebrow*
Me: Eh...NEXT SONG! *laughs nervously*
Manager: This is NOT working. COMMERCIAL BREAK!
Me: *machinery whirrs down as I start singing* Ohhh.....I just lo-HEEY! NO FAIR!
Commercial: Pikachu Steaks! Yumm yummy nummy! Juicy and Meaty! Fine print: Best served baked in a frying pan.
: *sweatdrop* Ehhh....
Me: GET 'IM!
: *runs away* AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!
All except : *chases* YUMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM!
: *gets stuck in tree* They'll never find me here...
Me: *peek* FOUND YA!
: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRGGGGGGH!
Director: CUT!
: Cut? OKAY! *uses razorleaf*
All: AAAAAAAAAAAAAGH!
*do do do dooo dooooo*
FIN
lolz. Funny, eh?
NEXT STORY!!!
Narrator: "Production Note: This Story contains life threatening situations and
Director: "Action!"
Ash: "*sigh* I don't like this place. It's too hot and dry..."
: "Pika pi...(Me niether)"
Misty: "And all my Pokemon are asleep from that wild Golbat."
Brock: "I think we should head west. I sense that thre's a town around there."
: "Pika? (What's that?)"
Ash: "HUH?!"
: "*jumps out* CRRAWKS!
: "PI-KAAAH! (Oh-noeeeez!)"
: "*uses Sunny Day* *Heat intesifies* GRWP!
: "*flies into air and land 10 feet away* Pi-i-i-ika-a-a-a...."
Misty + Brock: "Poor Pikachu!"
: "GRRRWAK! *uses Headbutt*
: "*gets hit* Pik! (Oww!)
: "*Sandstorm*"
: "*skids through sand, weakened* Pi-ka! (Aw, CRAP!)"
Ash: PIKACHU!
: "Piikaaa..."
: "*Body Slam* TWWACK!"
: "*barely alive* Pi-i-i-ika-a-a-a...(A-a-a-sh-h-h-h...)"
Ash: Pikachu?!
Brock: "Misty, Ash. We gotta get Pikachu to a Pokemon center. We're out of health items and the Sunny Day won't wear off until bedtime."
Ash: "I'll stay with Pikachu."
: "Ash, go on without me. I'm sure that you'll find help in time. But if not, you'll lose me forever. *cough choke wheeze*"
Ash: "I can't leave you! You guys go on!"
*Misty and brock leave*
: "*cough cough* Ash. They need you. Why stay here when you could use charizard to fly to a Pokemon Center?"
Ash: "Because you're also my Pikachu and you're my partner. Together, we're camoflauged targets metaphorically...Apart, we're sitting ducks."
: "Listen, *cough* Ash. If you had gone with them, you could have sent out one of you're Pokemon to protect me. Why stay?"
Ash: "Because...they might faint and leave you vulerable. You need shade. Go, Bayleef!"
: "Baay-LEEF! (Hi, Ash!) *grin*"
Ash: "*glares*"
: "*glances at Pikachu* What the hey happened?!"
Ash: "*shakes fist* JUST GIVE PIKACHU SOME SHADE!!!"
: "Okay okay! Jerk..."
: "Ash. I really don't need-"
Ash: "Of course you need shade!"
Meanwhile...
Nurse Joy: "Hi guys!"
Brock + Misty: "*frantically* ASH'S PIKACHU IS DYING!!!"
Prof. Oak: "*looks like a kid dressed up like him* Hi."
All: "*faints* Oyg!"
Oak: "*glances* Was it something I said?"
All: "*run afap(as fast as possible) to Ash's location* is Pikachu okay? Did he die? Did Spearows try to eat him like vultures?"
Ash: "Quiet! He's saying something..."
: "You must get me to a Pokemon center soon, I only have a weak grip on life."
Ash: "Go, CHARIZARD! Charizard, you need to fly us to Desert City!"
: "Poor Pikachu. *strongly and curiously* Is he dead? "
All: "HEEY!"
: "Hay is for horses and sometimes for cows! People don't eat it, cuz they don't know how! "
Director: "CUT!!! Great act! Good acting Pikachu, great! Second act coming soon! Lolz."
: "*blushes* Awww, thanks!"
WIP (Work in progress)
Last edited by Maple on Wed 09 Jan, 2008 1:39 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Hmm... still needs work, and it look like you took my adive the wrong way.
Here's an edited version of the above part of the story with these suggestions applied:
Still, you need help with your overall grammar. I still have trouble understanding the story...
What I actually meant by my post was that you put what characters actually say into quotation marks. And you should also avoid putting a person's actions in asterisks (*). And use more parenthesis. (())Nurse Joy: "Hi guys!"
Brock + Misty: "*frantically* ASH'S PIKACHU IS DYING!!!"
Here's an edited version of the above part of the story with these suggestions applied:
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Nurse Joy: "Hi guys!"
Brock & Misty (together, frantically): "ASH'S PIKACHU IS DYING!"
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Re: Pi-Ka-Pi-Pa-Pi-ka-Pi-Pi Do-Re-Squirtle-Char-La-Ti-Bulbasaur!
good effort, i guess you put some time into this but...
it was hard to follow
so i didnt get how it was funny
and i didnt understand most of it ;^;
it was hard to follow
so i didnt get how it was funny
and i didnt understand most of it ;^;
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